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The Fate of Customer 12

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HR Pinches
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[{"comment":"Wow, HR, this is stunning. The imagery, harsh descriptions, tightness of plot, theme repeated\u2013 all very effective. You wrote this in one week? I am impressed. Congratulations on winning this week!","author_url":"https:\/\/blog.reedsy.com\/creative-writing-prompts\/author\/cathryn-farr\/","author_avatar":"https:\/\/images-cdn.reedsy.com\/auth\/avatar\/2648908\/thumbnail_2f1de26b9cda27d203fc0a62bfb705b6698c4077.jpg","author_name":"Cathryn Farr"},{"comment":"Wow, HR, this is stunning. The imagery, harsh descriptions, tightness of plot, theme repeated\u2013 all very effective. You wrote this in one week? I am impressed. Congratulations on winning this week!","author_url":"https:\/\/blog.reedsy.com\/creative-writing-prompts\/author\/ken-cartisano\/","author_avatar":"https:\/\/images-cdn.reedsy.com\/auth\/avatar\/2341188\/thumbnail_950cf5fcb0d8a96924c8343beddc948381e38ff9.jpg","author_name":"Ken Cartisano"},{"comment":"I think the repetition of "Normal people don't have destinies," was a genius way to keep us in the story. As the story built, it was like a grounding phrase, bringing you back down.","author_url":"https:\/\/blog.reedsy.com\/creative-writing-prompts\/author\/crouton-828\/","author_avatar":"https:\/\/images-cdn.reedsy.com\/auth\/avatar\/751216\/thumbnail_e2feab29d12330174f7ceac0432ef522cd624829.jpg","author_name":"Crouton 828"},{"comment":"Repetition is tricky, it's one of those rules that can be broken for great creative effect. I think most readers felt like you did, Crouton 828, but the third time I read that line, I began to suspect that it had very little meaning. It appears to have worked fine for most people though.","author_url":"https:\/\/blog.reedsy.com\/creative-writing-prompts\/author\/ken-cartisano\/","author_avatar":"https:\/\/images-cdn.reedsy.com\/auth\/avatar\/2341188\/thumbnail_950cf5fcb0d8a96924c8343beddc948381e38ff9.jpg","author_name":"Ken Cartisano"},{"comment":"Avoiding their destiny was part of their destiny. Another way to combine yourself your always right.We\u2019ll played. A glimpse into the mind of someone who\u2019s job it is to convince you that they\u2019re right. I particularly enjoyed the spiral at the end, where the aerator is trying desperately to grasp onto the tiniest of threads.","author_url":"https:\/\/blog.reedsy.com\/creative-writing-prompts\/author\/michael-clark-2610cb\/","author_avatar":"https:\/\/images-cdn.reedsy.com\/auth\/avatar\/2504736\/thumbnail_948ee2f7d57de320baff9b901041f64f6ddb6281.jpg","author_name":"Michael Clark"},{"comment":"Clapping ","author_url":"https:\/\/blog.reedsy.com\/creative-writing-prompts\/author\/tommy-goround\/","author_avatar":"https:\/\/images-cdn.reedsy.com\/auth\/avatar\/1810729\/thumbnail_aa576c3db9478034a40fa19154a6978dbfde96ba.jpg","author_name":"Tommy Goround"},{"comment":"I loved your story, the stakes seemed very high and I was gripped by it! A pleasure to read and worthy of the win! I look forward to reading more of your work. :) Thank you for sharing.","author_url":"https:\/\/blog.reedsy.com\/creative-writing-prompts\/author\/theresa-amante\/","author_avatar":"https:\/\/images-cdn.reedsy.com\/auth\/avatar\/2633547\/thumbnail_38035643be46ac99c175a30de10624589fde71b2.jpg","author_name":"Theresa Amante"},{"comment":"Good work. A fated destiny being unreadable, while a free life with infinite choices is readable is a great idea. Congratulations on the win. ","author_url":"https:\/\/blog.reedsy.com\/creative-writing-prompts\/author\/chris-miller-b3a1a4\/","author_avatar":"https:\/\/images-cdn.reedsy.com\/avatar\/default\/1060274bc90076809718cff9566db8eaab1abfb5.png","author_name":"Chris Miller"},{"comment":"Great story! Kept me rapt all the way through. Well done!","author_url":"https:\/\/blog.reedsy.com\/creative-writing-prompts\/author\/kay-reed\/","author_avatar":"https:\/\/images-cdn.reedsy.com\/auth\/avatar\/2562974\/thumbnail_1b26958a664e9974c4d5d5fba55c1c7fbf81655c.jpg","author_name":"Kay Reed"},{"comment":"Incredible!","author_url":"https:\/\/blog.reedsy.com\/creative-writing-prompts\/author\/patrick-h\/","author_avatar":"https:\/\/images-cdn.reedsy.com\/auth\/avatar\/619398\/thumbnail_867b9a00623e417b4844f0dffcffb808848bad58.jpg","author_name":"Patrick H"},{"comment":"I found myself identifying with Customer 12. I have never visited a psychic before, but if I did, I would be extremely skeptical of any results. Congratulations on the win!","author_url":"https:\/\/blog.reedsy.com\/creative-writing-prompts\/author\/allen-decowsky\/","author_avatar":"https:\/\/images-cdn.reedsy.com\/auth\/avatar\/468673\/thumbnail_eaa2ff1bbc7c167e9692afdfad1a99650b5b6242.jpg","author_name":"Allen DeCowsky"},{"comment":"Love the take on the prompt and writing about a psychic--very good story and kept me reading and wondering where it would go. Also creates very interesting thoughts about what fate or destiny really is. Congratulations on the win!","author_url":"https:\/\/blog.reedsy.com\/creative-writing-prompts\/author\/hannah-leigh-da82c9\/","author_avatar":"https:\/\/images-cdn.reedsy.com\/auth\/avatar\/2592545\/thumbnail_a61f89f7eafb50d999c7e8ddf848fb199717b836.jpg","author_name":"Hannah Leigh"},{"comment":"Okay, you deserve the win. I once had an encounter with a psychic that truly threw me off my game, and I still wonder about that. And I wonder about the man who wanted to know and learned too much...maybe?Excellent work, sir!","author_url":"https:\/\/blog.reedsy.com\/creative-writing-prompts\/author\/kendall-defoe-ce7767\/","author_avatar":"https:\/\/images-cdn.reedsy.com\/auth\/avatar\/590206\/thumbnail_867b9a00623e417b4844f0dffcffb808848bad58.jpg","author_name":"Kendall Defoe"},{"comment":"An excellent debut. Great story!","author_url":"https:\/\/blog.reedsy.com\/creative-writing-prompts\/author\/jjm-gudde\/","author_avatar":"https:\/\/images-cdn.reedsy.com\/auth\/avatar\/2603182\/thumbnail_efa8c54826587bc0b2ed7aeae97474d0591f54ca.jpg","author_name":"JJM Gudde"},{"comment":"Everyone wants to know their destiny, yet you show why that might not be the best idea. The pace of the story was great, a slow burn until the dramatic end.Congrats on the win!","author_url":"https:\/\/blog.reedsy.com\/creative-writing-prompts\/author\/marty-b\/","author_avatar":"https:\/\/images-cdn.reedsy.com\/auth\/avatar\/1602139\/thumbnail_75eb3c3fd993fea5d007ba439de5df3343c8c1b5.jpg","author_name":"Marty B"},{"comment":"ThIS WAS THE BEST BOOK I HAVE EVER READ IN MY LIVE HOPE YOU HAVE A GOOD FUTURE.","author_url":"https:\/\/blog.reedsy.com\/creative-writing-prompts\/author\/ausha-garcia\/","author_avatar":"https:\/\/images-cdn.reedsy.com\/auth\/avatar\/2679989\/thumbnail_22f228fc6938344aa3608daaf823068ae9540246.jpg","author_name":"Ausha Garcia"},{"comment":"Congratulations! A very compelling read. Once our POV character meets customer 12, I literally couldn\u2019t read fast enough. I could feel the urgency and overwhelming experience the psychic was feeling. Excellent prose!","author_url":"https:\/\/blog.reedsy.com\/creative-writing-prompts\/author\/c-charles\/","author_avatar":"https:\/\/images-cdn.reedsy.com\/auth\/avatar\/1234679\/thumbnail_d59aff98a9137690e84f9752f2ec030b214ffb8c.jpg","author_name":"C. Charles"},{"comment":"a marvellous read. when it dawned on me that customer 12 was the psychic himself truly blew me away \u2014 the non-appointment before his lunch break, how he was unamazed by the decor, holding on to his wrist because if he doesn\u2019t he\u2019ll lose himself too, and the deep deep clarity he has with his own thoughts and emotions, the way he is able to \u201cread\u201d and explain and internalise them unlike with all his other actual customers?? loved this. my take may be so so wrong but this made me feel things either way. massive congratulations on the win. ","author_url":"https:\/\/blog.reedsy.com\/creative-writing-prompts\/author\/velix-sim\/","author_avatar":"https:\/\/images-cdn.reedsy.com\/auth\/avatar\/2574794\/thumbnail_aa210655a512ae82805d8023dd20a74d82cc0b24.jpg","author_name":"Velix Sim"},{"comment":"Great story. Fantastic and unique plot line, IMO well written. Not to mention, HR Pinches, you are now my new hero! You give a newbie like me hope! That's why I am here - to learn how to be a better writer from all of you. I have only read a brief sample of the contest winners to date, and I am reassured I made the correct choice to interact with mentors of your collective quality. I am ignoring the side issue raised during the comments - I encourage any and all to dump all over my submissions regardless of their motives.","author_url":"https:\/\/blog.reedsy.com\/creative-writing-prompts\/author\/wade-douglas\/","author_avatar":"https:\/\/images-cdn.reedsy.com\/auth\/avatar\/1934110\/thumbnail_f40bf26971ab7d89f86f990baff43a4bd846e699.jpg","author_name":"Wade Douglas"},{"comment":"Brilliant","author_url":"https:\/\/blog.reedsy.com\/creative-writing-prompts\/author\/l-lynn-wells-e0a222\/","author_avatar":"https:\/\/images-cdn.reedsy.com\/avatar\/default\/1460dc33fdc66db88bdcc5b32057457efeed3ce5.png","author_name":"L Lynn Wells"},{"comment":"This story is Sick!! I\u2019m awed ","author_url":"https:\/\/blog.reedsy.com\/creative-writing-prompts\/author\/kelly-dimario\/","author_avatar":"https:\/\/images-cdn.reedsy.com\/avatar\/default\/60575e106859a69dd2602b6df354f88bb8b9d6f9.png","author_name":"Kelly DiMario"},{"comment":"Normal people don\u2019t have destinies because they have choices. They are presented with an infinite number of decisions, which unfurl an infinite number of paths.You have a way with words, and had no idea where this story was going! Congrats on the win!","author_url":"https:\/\/blog.reedsy.com\/creative-writing-prompts\/author\/will-oyowe\/","author_avatar":"https:\/\/images-cdn.reedsy.com\/avatar\/default\/92df46d8beea7c1338063f5f5536ea08e5b86353.png","author_name":"Will Oyowe"}]