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[{"comment":"Welcome to Reedsy Alice. A nice introductory piece here, full of melancholic reminiscence. There is a lot unsaid and that's ok, let the reader fill in the blanks. The mood is as grey as the day outside, rain pattering on windows, the right kind of day for a final goodbye.","author_url":"https:\/\/blog.reedsy.com\/creative-writing-prompts\/author\/kevin-logue\/","author_avatar":"https:\/\/images-cdn.reedsy.com\/auth\/avatar\/2666602\/thumbnail_4d93692a133d5538f69c328d8b1e9e5006ffd2b6.jpg","author_name":"Kevin Logue"},{"comment":"Hi Alice! I really like your writing style! Your choice of words seems really thoughtful and experienced, and I love your comparisons, for example the \u201elike cold, dead fingers squeezing and clinging onto her heart\u201c. Also, the small details you add to the story, that give the characters personality, like mentioning his habits (wanting everything in place, the blue color having been used the most). It feels really intimate.Really great writing! ","author_url":"https:\/\/blog.reedsy.com\/creative-writing-prompts\/author\/lilly-stolpe\/","author_avatar":"https:\/\/images-cdn.reedsy.com\/avatar\/default\/5bd2f77c9b933a634e98256f102c0d5e3e7666f6.png","author_name":"Lilly Stolpe"},{"comment":"Hi Alice.You don't tell what happened to him. Why is the room empty? How long has it been since they've been apart? But you didn't need those details. She is in a room that means something to her, and she is leaving something behind that meant something to them. It belonged in her past. She is moving on. Her intimate goodbye leaves what they had inside that room as she must move on without him. Very effective and emotional in the way you told your story. ","author_url":"https:\/\/blog.reedsy.com\/creative-writing-prompts\/author\/patricia-casey\/","author_avatar":"https:\/\/images-cdn.reedsy.com\/auth\/avatar\/2009684\/thumbnail_117a4c1ed0d8fe8155ff8e7f4f4b5412532b7899.jpg","author_name":"Patricia Casey"},{"comment":"More of this kind would stamp you. Congrats.","author_url":"https:\/\/blog.reedsy.com\/creative-writing-prompts\/author\/philip-ebuluofor\/","author_avatar":"https:\/\/images-cdn.reedsy.com\/avatar\/default\/3ddbb55116373e04a0b9c15f93eb1706e4a87bee.png","author_name":"Philip Ebuluofor"},{"comment":"This was so heartbreaking. The story unraveled a bit like a mystery for me, as I wondered what the relationship between the main character and the dead man was. At first I thought she was his girlfriend, which made his "great love like the kind I never got to have" line sound mean and dismissive. But then at the end I realized that they were siblings and that he had been cruelly forced to stay in the closet, causing him to ultimately commit suicide, which was so bitter and sad to accept. A beautifully told, simple story.","author_url":"https:\/\/blog.reedsy.com\/creative-writing-prompts\/author\/audrey-knox\/","author_avatar":"https:\/\/images-cdn.reedsy.com\/auth\/avatar\/2717123\/thumbnail_d12b99b1aabb817d99513af0548fbd30234d22fb.jpg","author_name":"Audrey Knox"},{"comment":"thank you so much!","author_url":"https:\/\/blog.reedsy.com\/creative-writing-prompts\/author\/alice-white-37fbe4\/","author_avatar":"https:\/\/images-cdn.reedsy.com\/auth\/avatar\/2637213\/thumbnail_c1ac797573cb3fdeb6b9b33439d0d9891e0b1b52.jpg","author_name":"Alice White"},{"comment":"A good slow burn story","author_url":"https:\/\/blog.reedsy.com\/creative-writing-prompts\/author\/rose-lind\/","author_avatar":"https:\/\/images-cdn.reedsy.com\/auth\/avatar\/1294332\/thumbnail_dea5ed8970cc138517cd5461c5550cf982129371.jpg","author_name":"Rose Lind"},{"comment":"A good slow burn story","author_url":"https:\/\/blog.reedsy.com\/creative-writing-prompts\/author\/ken-cartisano\/","author_avatar":"https:\/\/images-cdn.reedsy.com\/auth\/avatar\/2341188\/thumbnail_950cf5fcb0d8a96924c8343beddc948381e38ff9.jpg","author_name":"Ken Cartisano"},{"comment":"Congratulations on your shortlist win, Alice! (:","author_url":"https:\/\/blog.reedsy.com\/creative-writing-prompts\/author\/karen-corr\/","author_avatar":"https:\/\/images-cdn.reedsy.com\/auth\/avatar\/399226\/thumbnail_f852c236b7887828e167de7dd0aa8da34d3823a9.jpg","author_name":"Karen Corr"},{"comment":"thank you!!","author_url":"https:\/\/blog.reedsy.com\/creative-writing-prompts\/author\/alice-white-37fbe4\/","author_avatar":"https:\/\/images-cdn.reedsy.com\/auth\/avatar\/2637213\/thumbnail_c1ac797573cb3fdeb6b9b33439d0d9891e0b1b52.jpg","author_name":"Alice White"}]